Feedback from our First Draft

We waited for a while after posting the first draft of our trailer on the internet for people to see it and reply to us with feedback on what was good about the trailer and what we could of done better. Here is some of the feedback we received from people on Facebook and YouTube.

After receiving the above feedback we decided to go back to our editing and try and find a way of extending the music so that is plays throughout the trailer which would keep up the tension, and built suspense during the course of the whole trailer, instead of just certain parts. However, even though this was possible, we decided that it was not necessary as it would mean deleting the scenes with the new reporter, which acted as our voice over. We came to a group decision that the news reporter was a vital part in the film, and that we could not remove it, so we kept the music at the same length as it had originally been.

We received quite a few comments on YouTube about the news reporter and its effectiveness. Some of the feedback suggested that the scenes with the news reporter were unrealistic and unprofessional. After agreeing to work on this criticism, we set about changing the actor who played the news reporter. We had decided that an adult would work better instead of a teenager and we also edited the dialogue for the reporter so that it sounded more professional. By displaying our first draft on the internet we could positively and successfully use the constructive feedback given to us in order to improve our trailer.

We received more feedback from our peers, and reviewed comments made about the colouring of our production logo. Originally the production logo had been red, and we received comments about the improper use of colouring and how it did not relate to the rest of the trailer, which had teal/light blue writing. So we decided to go back to our production logo, and revert the colour to the teal/light blue that we had used throughout our media production. 

Finally, we added one more scene to the end of the trailer, where our protagonist walks down a school corridor. We did this after receiving constructive criticism that the protagonist should be the last scene that the audience views. This is because the whole trailer has built up mystery and suspense about who the character is, so the image of the protagonist walking away will persuade the audience to watch the film to find out more.